
First light dawns and floats
Small weathered boats
The lake looks to be stagnating
Simply waiting
“Are there enough fish in this murk?”
To work
Fishermen begin to smirk
This is a fishing town for sure
The water should not be pure
Small weathered boats simply waiting to work
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© Carol Campbell 2016
For two prompts:
Unraveling the Ovillejo (a new poetic form rolls up to the Bar)
Prompt offered by De Jackson:
“The explanation below is offered from several online sources, which seem to be attributed most often to Rhina P. Espaillat:
…the “ovillejo,” an old Spanish verse form that means “tight little bundle.” “-ejo” is one of our blessed diminutives, and “ovillo” means “tangled ball of yarn.” The last line is a “redondilla,” a “little round” that collects all three of the short lines. The rhyme scheme is established, but the meter is at the poet’s discretion, although in Spanish the longer lines tend to be octosyllabic (8 syllables).”
And:
Pic and a Word Challenge by Patrich Jennings:
Waiting ~ Pic and a Word Challenge #19
The picture and the word “Waiting”.
Thanks to everyone for two great prompts!
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Hard work……Fishing!!!! 😉
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Haha! For the fish, yes?
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and the human…though more so for the fish I think since they must evade or be caught 🙂
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🙂
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I agree!
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I think you managed this form expertly!! Nicely done.
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Thank you very much.I was not sure at all.
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Goodness! How amazingly this works. A fantastic offering for the form. Thank you!
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Really. I did not feel very good about it at all. Thanks so much. Challenging and stretching is good!
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Really well done with the form ~ I think it takes a lot of work 🙂
Thanks for joining us at D’verse ~
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Thank you. Joining you all is very nice!
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This is wonderfully done and captures the essence of the picture, too. Peace, Linda
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Thank you, Linda!
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Peaceful thing fishing, very good poem.
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Thank you. It is!
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wonderful… but I still wonder if you can eat the fish,,,
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Haha. I know I wouldn’t. Thanks!
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Those boats do look they are impatient to get to work.
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Don’t they? Thank you.
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I’ve seen photos of various fishing boats, nevermind passenger busses, around the word that have these personal decorations, sometimes even garishly painted. this tells me the local folks take real personal pride and ownership. the waters in some of these 3rd world areas I wouldn’t even want to pi$$ in, sad to say. one day i’ll get to understand all these fancy schmancy poem formats. “Gimme that ol’ time iambic pentameter, gimme that ol’ time iambic pentameter, gimme that ol’ time iambic pentameter, it’s good enough for me….”
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😀
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A fabulous, if slightly fishy, poem, Carol !
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Hahaha! Very true. Thank you!
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Hi Carol,
Just wanted to make sure your were notified that I nominated you for the DARTS Award. You can check out my post at http://susansdevotionaljournal.com/2016/01/14/an-award-susans-devotional-journal/ where it will explain if you didn’t receive the pingback.
Thanks, Susan…
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Thanks, Susan. I still haven’t done that other great award you nominated me for. I just haven’t been able to. Please know that it’s not due to not appreciating the thought. Thanks again!
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I feel a bit of Arabesque, in this verse. It’d be interesting to examine the influence of Arabic poets on their counterparts in Spain.
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The Moors?
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I really liked your poem of the boats waiting impatiently to get to work at “first light.” Well done to the form too, Carol! It was tricky wasn’t it?
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Thank you. It sure was trying. 🙂
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this tricky form wonderfully executed…
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Thank you. It surely is tricky!
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Ah.. the murky
waters no longer
supporting fishing
life.. oh.. the cloudy
ways of work
no longer
human
where
only
machine
cogs need apply..:)
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That is the truth, my friend!
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SMiLes.. My friend..:)
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Lovely, and a cleverly beautiful interweaving of the short lines to create an astonishing kicker. Nicely done.
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Thanks so very much, Patrick!
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Great job – feels seamless
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Thank you fro a great comment.
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