Your Room

I walked into your room

The one in which I had just bathed you

The one where we had laid on the bed and talked

You wanted to share memories

You wanted me to remember

And to know

To know that you loved me

That you were sorry that you…

That room

A room that smelled of Chanel #5

Where we could hear your grandson playing outside

Where we laughed and celebrated your

Your precious life

And then, when I walked into that room

Your spirit had departed

Returned to the one love of your life

Oh sure, your body was there but

I remember the feeling of so many souls

Surrounding you as you were rising up

Up to that place that held all the people that you loved

Except us

We stay here til our appointed time

When that day comes

I will reminisce with you again

I will put my head on your lap

I will feel comforted

As we both leave behind

That room.


© Carol Campbell

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Poetics – Room With or Without a View

Mary is hosting poetics this time and she has asked us to write about a room. In her words:

“That brings me to the prompt for today: I think it will be kind of fun to reflect on ‘rooms’ or ‘a room’ in poetry. Have you ever entered a room and found that someone you didn’t want to see was there, but now that you were there you knew you had to stay? Do you have a memory of your childhood bedroom or childhood kitchen? Or attic? Or basement? Do you have a ‘room memory’ as an adult? A hotel room? An office? Your grandmother’s living room? A hospital room? What is the room like? Its smell? Who is there in the room? Or is it empty? What emotions does the room bring about? Does anyone speak? Describe a scene in a particular room – real or imagined?

Or looking at ROOM in another way: Is the room itself a character? (Perhaps use personification?) Or is the room a part of the background…..or the foreground? What would the room say if it could speak?  Example:  What would the hospital room (is someone dying) say?  What would the dining room (who is eating?) say?

Try to use as many senses as you can. Bring the room and/or experiences within the room alive vividly.

I really hope you will make the presence of the ROOM felt.  I am excited about this prompt and hope you will find it interesting too.”

I’m also linking with The Garden’s open link Tuesday Platform.

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Published by: writersdream9

I have been writing all my life but for the most part, it has been a secret. My parents did not believe writing was a good way to earn money so I hid my poems. Then one day, I wanted to comment on an essay that a friend had written and found myself with a blog. That quiet whisper inside said, "You can write your poetry and no one will ever know.". I knew nothing of followers and the like at that time. So, here I am trying to learn my craft and enjoying every moment of it. My personal details are, I'm 57, married for 39 years, have one grown son who is God's gift to us and last but not least at all, I'm a Baha'i which basically means that I love all humanity.

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61 thoughts on “Your Room”

  1. “A room that smelled of Channel #5
    Where we could hear your grandson playing outside”

    This made the poem for me … the rhyme, but also the positioning of vibrant new life next to loss and death.

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  2. So much happens in one room and leaving that room the final time leaving others behind is so sad! There were a few poems about death this week, my mom died 2 years ago on Valentine’s Day so the holiday isn’t the same anymore.
    What a wonderful prompt sorry I missed it but I’ll try to join in next week.

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