That empty feeling
The echo of my voice
You gave me no choice
Emptiness is so cold
~
You know that space
“Where there was something
And suddenly isn’t”… anything
Emptiness is so cold
~
Though I don’t understand
I will carry on my own way
There is nothing left to say
Emptiness is so cold
~~~~
Ā© Carol Campbell
Mary is hosting at Poetics~ Choose a Line this time and she has introduced, at least, to me, a poet named Naomi Shihab. I Love her work and encourage you to read her. The poem that Mary chose is, “Burning the old year”. I chose the line highlighted above but let me tell you, it was hard to choose. Here’s the link to read her poem which leaves my words in the dust but we try. š
http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/178317
Thank you, Mary!
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I love your poetic rendering of what happens after someone loved leaves
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Thank you. Very cold!
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Yes you’re welcome š
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Have you forgotten the collaboration or just out of time?
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Sorry I had meetings yesterday. I just checked the doc and left a few questions
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Okay. Sorry to pester. Was just wondering! š
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No worries š you weren’t pestering š
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Excellent description Carol.. and wonderful image to accompany your words..
Sending you warm thoughts to fill the void! š and hope you enjoy the rest of your day my friend xxx Hugs Sue
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Thank you. Grateful that right now I am not experiencing this!
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Simple, yet sweet!
chris
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Thank you!
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Mosted welcome!
chris
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Worship & respect for 3 prophets broadens the horizons of love, tolerance, & sensitivity. It is remarkable, but for each of us, after experiencing the dark sphere you describe, we still have the capacity for both healing & finding new joy in someone else.
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The indomitable human spirit! Thanks, Glenn!
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You have really heightened the effect of the message through your repetitions. Indeed emptiness is SO cold!
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Thank you!
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Emptiness is like an echo… repeating in emptiness…
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So true!
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Your use of repetition really drummed in the emptiness of it all.
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Thank you!
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empty, cold and grey.
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The repetition is striking and quite telling. It screams emptiness! Superb!
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Thank you!
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I’m adding my kudos for that repeating line – adds such power to your poem
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Thank you, Candy!
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Your poem makes us feel that pain. A very good write!
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Thank you, Gabriella!
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You said so much by adding so few words to the borrowed line, and made it your own. This is so sad.
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Thank you, Linda!
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“Emptiness is so cold” – what a powerful description of loss. Much emotion described in this.
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Thank you, Bryan!
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That refrain resonates very well – that emptiness is so cold ~ Well done ~
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Thank you, Grace!
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This feels very much like a song lyric – with the repetition of the final line of each stanza.
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Thank you!
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My FRiEnD.. i have been to a place
so cold.. so empty that i screamed
to God to let me feel
even a scream..
beyond sadness..
beyond grief..
beyond
paper thin
existence..
1000 years
in one second
of REAL HELL
‘hear’ on Earth..
but Heaven iS Real
and now too.. and perhaps
if the price of thaT is HeLL..
it iS
worth
aLL of those
thousands
years
iN
one
second
tHere.. my friend..
a UniVerse within
to live or escape
i
wilLL
to Live
and FeeL more
than eva’ before..
as that first bully boy
in school who told me
only Queers smile was
DEAD
WRONG..
WinKS..
LOVE
WiNS
as KinG
of the UniVerse
of hUman miNd/boDy alWays
now.. iN eternity of Love iS..
with
ZERO
FEAR.. GIVING
SHARING NOW
NEVER ENDING
FOREVERMORE
NOW..
iT iS… REAL..:)
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Yes! I agree! š
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