
“Maybe if I stare hard enough and long enough, you will appear.”.I whispered to the golden dawn. Just as I had whispered to the peach sunset last night. I missed you so much that magic was even a possibility that I was exploring fervently at these turning points from day to night and night to day. It really had become a ritual of love. I got up in the darkness of the hours preceding the sun’s shift to my side of the world and dressed in my favorite gowns. In the evening, I put the silken robe that you presented to me on our 7th anniversary with the hopes that somehow the powerful worship of our love would summon you back to my arms.
You made it all legal four months ago and left me on my knees with grief as you strode out of our nest and took flight with your outstretched wings reaching that elusive treat of “something better”. Tell me, is she better?
© Carol Campbell
https://janedougherty.wordpress.com/2016/09/09/microfiction-challenge-13-woman-in-the-sun/
Words: Dawn, sunset, worship, magic, power and legal.
Poignant. I hope she gets to find her own ‘something better’ 😔
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I agree! Carol this is powerful writing. You tugged on my heart strings with this one!
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Me too! Thank you!
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You gave that a really interesting and sad twist, Carol, and all very fortuitously. That last word I suggested was ‘regal’. You substituted ‘legal’ and made a completely different story. I like it!
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Oh dear! I am glad that it worked though!! 🙂
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It did! Just gave it an extra unique thread to the plot 🙂
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This is a delightful response Carol, loved how you shaped your story…
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Thank you, Michael!
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a hauntingly mysterious story. well done!!
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Carol this is such a touching post, so in-depth as the reader reads deeper into each line.. I read it twice my friend, and marvel at your magic for weaving such feeling within such a few short words.. I applaud you Carol..
Sending lots of Love dear friend, and lovely to see this wonderful post xxx Hugs and Love and well wishes sent your way my friend 🙂 Sue ❤
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I’m so glad that it touched you! I appreciate your visits and comments and am blessed to call you friend!
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Like wise dearest Carol xxx
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Beautifully sad! Hugs. 💞💞
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Thank you!
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Hugs!
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Oh my gosh! This one got to me, Carol! Goosebumps here!!! ❤
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I am glad it touched you, dear friend! Thank you!
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Beautiful. You can feel her sadness and longing.
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Thank you, my friend!
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Beautifully done! I hope she finds something better.
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Thank you! 🙂 Me too.
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Oh…break my heart!! 💔
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❤
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