Three inspired ladies go for a walk
They walked in nature cool and clean
This day the set out on an adventure
An adventure at which some may balk
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That day they set out with pedometer
Into a field of brilliant pink daisies
They tread and tread without a care
Their happy hearts were all aflutter
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Of a sudden they discovered that the world was flat and they fell off. So much for history and science. Evolution?
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© Carol Campbell
http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/
Mama Zen asks us to write something in 77 words or less that shocks. Hey, this is the best I can do. I don’t even watch thrillers. I guess I don’t like to be shocked. I must say, though that it was fun. Thanks, Mama Zen!
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Ha! Serves them right for treading on the daisies!
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Hahaha! That’s right! Thanks, Mama Zen!
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Good luck with that one.
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Haha!
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Sounds like a day I had this week! Lol! Evolution sounds about right they way the human race is going…
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Yes! Thank you!
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hahaha 🙂 Going along real nice like, with the ladies, la la la , and then Boom! they fell off the edge! Love it!!! 🙂
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It was great fun to write! Thank you!
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it’s always interesting to me that we’ve a higher development chance to instinctually be and respond without rankor to others…yet where have you noted no lack of highly developed military training within the monks? so the christian sorry i don’t know all the lines from all the different flavors out there… says if someone/enemy smites your face…turn the other cheek – no where in this does it say to be begging for disrespect, it simply says do not respond of egoic injury…such is a waste. or if an enemy strikes one’s face- do do truly turn the other cheek as one lands a flowerpot back…. okay slapstick comedy gems and warped teaching 😀
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🙂
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Heehee. This brought a (shocked) smile. 😉
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I’m glad! Thank you!
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Plot twist!
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Of the silly variety!
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Hahahaha!
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😀
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very whimsical. you should read Edwin Abbott’s classic, Flatland.
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I can almost hear the giggles. And I like them. 🙂
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Thank you! I’m glad you do!
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Ha wonde what I should be most shocked by, the crushed daisies, the fallen ladies or science’s failure…
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Haha! Definitely the daisies.
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Great response to the challenge. Everything surprises — change in meter, rhyme, from poetry to prose, poesies to smashed noses. Loved it.
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Thank you!
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Ha – definitely a surprise ending!
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Thank you!
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I love the poem! It’s a delightful modern day fairy tale with a humorous twist! Evolution indeed!
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I’m happy that you enjoyed it!
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😀 I did. I could picture it and now I’m wondering if they’re not hanging off the end of the world suspended by fingertips…
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Hahaha! Good one!
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The real question is, does the pedometer make a sound if it falls off the world into a starry void?
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One hand clapping?
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lol! I like that answer!
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Well, that was a cool twist. It started off so happy!
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My mind went to a strange place when asked to shock!
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Evolution or de-evolution? I love the flat earth ending, I wasn’t ready for that.
“Shocking!!!?” ‘Surprising’ for sure.
Similarities: My blogging started with wanting to leave a smart aleck comment on an old family friend’s blog that my sister steered me to. I had to do Blogger to be able to post the comment. I began to post poems after I found “One Single Impression” a poetry blogging center. It went defunct so then I went full time with the Toads here. Before I had visited now and then.
It wasn’t my family that didn’t like poetry, I just didn’t ever write anything for them. I didn’t study meter and rhyme in 10th grade English until I was a Senior because my grade 10 teacher order an 11th grade set of books. My first ten grades were at two different Nebraska country schools. (BTW, Mrs. Jim and I will be married 43 years as of the 24th of February.)
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Congratulations on your marriage! Interesting that we have similar stories. God bless you both!
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Smashing daises comes with a price… love it!
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Thank you very much!
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