The clouds descend around me now
Bringing quiet and peace within
Play and dance to my violin
~
My soul, at this time, will endow
New energy to simply be
To live within the here and now
~
More at peace than I’ve ever been
The clouds descend around me now
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Octain Refrain–dVerse Meeting the Bar
Victoria Slotto is tending Pub this time and has introduced the Octain Refrain to us pubsters. It’s an interesting form and I enjoyed trying it out! Thank you, Victoria!
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Beautiful!
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My pleasure!
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🙂
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Oh wow. 💕💕💕💕
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Thanks, Sarah! Have a blessed day!
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You too, Carol!
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I love that living in the here and now ~
As to the form, I think you need to repeat the first and last line: The clouds descend around me now ~
Happy Easter to you !!!
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It is so important, that message to live in the now. Grace mentioned the repetition of the first and last lines, but then there is always poetic license.
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Oh, I am sorry. I admit that I missed that!
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Not to worry.
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Nice one Carol.
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Thank you!
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The eternal struggle for peace well expressed, Carol! Very nice!
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Thank you, Walt and it is eternal! 🙂
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Sweet yearning eased.
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Lovely comment. Thank you!
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a shrouded mist gently nourishing the trees with moisture so the sun can later do its work. very lovely.
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Beautiful Carol, especially those opening lines.
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The peace is really palpable in your poem!! Reading it is like breathing out….and in!
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Thank you!
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Clouds bring mist, and thus moisture- enveloping peace.
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🙂 Thank you.
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Shrouded in clouds and finding peace in the here and now…sounds good to me! A beautiful Octain, Carol.
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this surely spreads a feeling of peace and calm
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Thank you!
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Very nicely done. Love you blog, it’s beautiful!
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Thank you very much, Ginny!
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I love the idea of hiding within a cloud…just lovely.
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Thank you, De!
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Beautiful musicality in your octain. Luke is a musician too and a great lover of music. I think when he came up with this form that it would lend itself well to a poem like this. Excellent write. Thank you.
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You painted such a beautiful picture with your rhythmic words. ❤
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More at peace than I’ve ever been
The clouds descend around me now
Amen! ❤
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I feel a calming voice of tranquility in your words. The refrain line is so comforting. Love it.
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sMiLes.. a long
walk for me iN
Nature today..
wITH Rain drops
faLLinG on my head..
i aM
RaiN..
i SinG
a SonG
fearless.. wiTh
Water FloWinG
Sun GroWinG
rain
comes
hard
and soft as LiFe..:)
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Sounds like a heavenly walk!
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