Daibutsu no katahada no yuki toki ni keri
the snow has melted
on one shoulder
of the Great Buddha
© Shiki
My revision:
snowdrops thaw
pure white temple glows
lake is frozen
~~~
© Carol Campbell 2016
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Daibutsu no katahada no yuki toki ni keri
the snow has melted
on one shoulder
of the Great Buddha
© Shiki
My revision:
snowdrops thaw
pure white temple glows
lake is frozen
~~~
© Carol Campbell 2016
❤ ❤ ❤
Nice revision Carol … what a beautiful haiku.
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Thank you very much, Kristjaaen!
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Gorgeous haiku both yours and the challenge!
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Thank you!
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you’re welcome 🙂
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Lovely revision and your photo if stunning, Carol!
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Thank you very much!
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Our blessed White Temple!
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Yes!
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two beautiful renditions. can’t say which I prefer.
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Both are splendid Carol … your haiku and the beautiful Willamette Temple!
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Thank you!
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